Snazzy Snippets #2 (In Which I Force My NaNo Down Your Throats)

5:14 AM Gemma Fitz 12 Comments

If you missed the train back in September and didn't participate in Snazzy Snippets, it's back-- just in time for NaNo-- and you should really go do it. What is Snazzy Snippets? It's a bi-monthly link-up hosted by Alyssa @ The Devil Orders Takeout and Emily @ Loony Literate where you get the perfect excuse to shove your novel into the faces of unenthusiastic blog readers.

It's awesome.

 So here we go!

a snippet without dialogue

Well, this one was easy. This is actually my favourite passage of my novel, so far. I love both Rae (my POV character) and her shadow (in spite of the slightly awkward fact that it's evil) and cake, so I am extremely happy with this snippet.
I’m not sure why it doesn’t bother me that my shadow can talk. I mean, that isn’t normal, right? The rest of the world isn’t going around with whispering shadows and just not telling me about it, right? Your shadow doesn’t talk to you, right?
I thought not.
I guess I’m just used to it. I don’t remember quite when it started, but I do remember that I had a “seizure” on my ninth birthday, which was really just my shadow pulling me to the floor and holding me there so that it could let me in on the fact that the birthday cake might be poisoned, and it really wasn’t a smart idea to eat a piece before someone else had tried it first and proven that it was fit for consumption.
None of which I cared about, I might add. I just wanted cake, and I started crying when my shadow wouldn’t let me stand up, which contributed to my parents' conclusion that I was having a seizure. (I should probably mention that neither of them had ever seen a real seizure.)
I spent three hours of my ninth birthday waiting in line at the ER. By the time I got in, my shadow had given up on me as a lost cause, and I was totally fine. But the cake was gone by the time I got home.
(This is why I sometimes say I had a traumatic childhood. I’m really not exaggerating.)

 a snippet featuring a family member

There is some really important family stuff going down in this story. Rae has two sisters, and her relationships with both are far from perfect, but kinda cute anyway.
When Sophie gets home, I’m already waiting for her, sitting on her bed. It’s softer than mine, and the blanket I stole from the foot and draped around myself is really warm. I might steal it for good.
The doorknob turns and Sophie steps in. She glances over me, then rolls her eyes and heads towards the bathroom. “Go away, Rae,” she says.
“I thought we had something to talk about tonight?” I ask.
“Rae, it’s 9 o’clock. I’m tired. Do you really think this can’t wait?”
“Did you have to work overtime today?” I don’t really care. “And no, this can’t wait.”
“Fine,” says Sophie. She grabs a hairbrush from her nightstand and runs it through her hair as she sits down next to me. “Go ahead, shoot me.”
Sophie is actually a pretty good sister, but for some reason we don’t get along too well. Maybe because I’m not a good sister. Or maybe just because we are the two most different people in the history of the universe.
I struggle with all the words I want to say for a moment. “What are you even doing?” I finally manage.
“Brushing my hair-- you?”
“Ha ha-- hilarious.”
And I'm going to stop there for today.
Did you do Snazzy Snippets? (can i have a link?)

12 comments:

  1. Alea HarperNovember 5, 2015 at 6:17 AM

    0.0 Your book sounds awesome. A talking shadow?! You are a complete genius.

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  2. A. M. PotterNovember 5, 2015 at 3:57 PM

    What, that's ALL? I want to hear more!!
    Caaaaaake.... *crawls away*

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    1. Gemma FitzNovember 5, 2015 at 6:07 PM

      Yup... for now. Thanks though. :)
      Yesss cake. I neeeed some.

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  3. Aimee MeesterNovember 7, 2015 at 9:42 AM

    That's...awesome o.0 I want to read more!

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  4. AneeqahNovember 8, 2015 at 7:05 PM

    Uhm, I needed this books in my hands like YESTERDAY. I absolutely LOVE the idea of the talking shadow! I also am in love with the voice of your main character. That's something I'm struggling to nail with my MC (yay NaNoWriMo woes? :P) because she's a lot more reserved than I am. But you're really nailing your MC here and I totally think I would like her. <3

    Hope NaNoWriMo is treating you well! :D Thanks for sharing your snippet.

    -Aneeqah @ The Writing Hustle

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    1. Gemma FitzNovember 9, 2015 at 6:31 AM

      Aw, thank you!! I normally have so much trouble with my MCs, but this one just kinda clicked with me somehow. I totally know what you're going through, though-- *sigh* Thanks for commenting!

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  5. Alyssa CarlierNovember 11, 2015 at 4:53 AM

    WOAH WOAH WOAH TALKING SHADOWS AND CAKE? I am so in for this. That gif is perfect, and I love the snarky relationship between the sisters. These snippets are fantastic, thanks for linking up!

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  6. a.n.g.November 12, 2015 at 6:53 PM

    This sounds really interesting! I hope writing goes well. :D

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